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SarahBear
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PostSubject: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 18, 2010 3:38 am



Its about 2 girls who are on hoilday and they find a sliver locket and when
they discover something about the locket they wished they never kept it..



Once upon a time in South Carolina 2 girls called Zoey and Abby were on the phone.
Hi Zoey
Hi Abby
Wanna come sleep at mine Abby?
Sure Zoey.
Bye Abby
Bye Zoey

The phone got turned of and Zoey ran upstairs to sort her room out.
She made some nice food and got lots of fun stuff for them to do.The doorbell rang Zoey's big sister let Abby in.Abby went upstairs to Zoey's room.

Zoey Zoey abby shouted i am going on hoilday tomorrow so i cant sleep but your coming on hoilday with me i think ask your mom first.
Zoey ran down to her mom
Mom please can i go on hoilday with Abby?
Fine said mom but pack your bags,Abby help her pack her bags.Abby packed Zoey's bag for her while Zoey found her favourite teddy and her cell phone.
Abby and Zoey walked to Abbys house.1 hour later they were there.

Chapter 2
Abby's room was gigantic and full of pink and glamours sunglasses.
Zoey's room was just all small basically the size of a closet.
When Abby's mom got Zoey and Abby to sleep she was packing her bag.Her Mom and Dad were having a chat about Zoey being away from her mom and dad.
Abby's dad said She must not have been that scared she wanted to come.
It was morning now and they were on the plane.

Abby and Zoey sat next to each other and in front of Zoey was Miley Cryus and Noah Cryus.They went crazy because the both girls love Miley Cryus and Noah.

Chapter 3
They arrived at New Mexico,When they were at the beach they were swimming a shark come... Zoey ran quickly as she could be abby was no were to be seen
Zoey happended to find a silver locket



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Lillybearathlete1
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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 18, 2010 6:32 am

It's a great story.
When writing a story put the character's dialogue in " and ".
Also, a suggestion would be to add more adjectives to your summary so that it makes people want to read your story.
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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 18, 2010 6:56 am

Yay, my name! Razz
Great story, I like it!
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SarahBear
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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 18, 2010 11:43 am

Lillybearathlete1 wrote:
It's a great story.
When writing a story put the character's dialogue in " and ".
Also, a suggestion would be to add more adjectives to your summary so that it makes people want to read your story.

When it gets more into the story i will!
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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 18, 2010 12:39 pm

Cool Story Sarah! Can't Wait to hear more!

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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 25, 2010 2:58 am

Great story Sarah
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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Sun Jul 25, 2010 1:52 pm

Great story so far Sarah. Keep on practicing your writing skills.
I can't wait to hear more.
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PostSubject: Re: Silver Locket   Thu Nov 11, 2010 12:24 pm

Pawsome story!
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